Do You Haiku?

If you had asked me that question before today my answer would definitely be in the negative. Not just a “no”, but a “who me? Do those difficult poems? That clever people do??”

But I thought I’d give it a go.

Here’s my first attempt – please be gentle with your critique…


Rain slicing grey skies,

Night time falls with savage rage.

Daybreak brings new hope.


I enjoyed composing it, and thinking about every single word in it to convey exactly what I want it to whilst keeping within the restrictions of the form. Definitely something to do again!




About Pam Smith

I am a Christian and currently exploring vocation. I am a writer, I conduct a brass band, I am an avid reader and when I'm not doing any of those things I crochet with a fierce passion. I am mum to two fantastic young adults, celebrating my Silver wedding anniversary in 2016 with my husband. I recently gained my Bachelor of Arts with honours.
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13 Responses to Do You Haiku?

  1. Of course I do whoku stuff. Sample below:


    Pretty good, eh ?


  2. dderbydave says:

    Three line poem, five beats
    Each sandwiching seven beats
    Haiku math butty


  3. pattisj says:

    Now that wasn’t so bad, was it? 🙂 Good job.


  4. You did well with this one!


    • sterlingsop says:

      Thank you Susan! I enjoyed the creative process and am rather pleased with this first effort. I am not entirely comfortable with the way the 5-7-5 syllables scan but it’s definitely worth sticking with and doing again in the future.


  5. I am not one who has any right critiquing, I had to look up what Haiku even is. Much to my surprise the search engine then wanted to know did I mean Haiku in English form.
    Sorry it took so long to get here i was reading what the two mean. I still have just a slight clue, no real measure of how this is done.
    That being said I think your poem is striking expression between day and night.
    Thanks so much for sharing and please keep up the awesome work.

    Abundant Blessings ~ BB


    • sterlingsop says:

      Thanks BB – your comments mean a lot to me and I appreciate your feedback. I have never tried a Haiku before but I thought I’d give it a go as a bit of an academic exercise. I’m really pleased with the results to be honest! Even though I’m not entirely happy with the way the 5-7-5 syllables scan, I think I will be doing some more in the future. Thank you 🙂


  6. Maxi says:

    I have no idea what Haiku means but your poem is wow. Great job, Pam.
    Blessings – Maxi


    • sterlingsop says:

      I’m new to Haiku Maxi, so am very green, but it’s a form of poetry that follows a strict format. It is a three line poem composed of 5 syllables, then 7, then 5. They are Japanese in origin and I’m not sure I like them to be honest. They don’t scan very well in English and it annoys me that they don’t feel very natural. But as an academic exercise they are good to get the old grey matter fizzing!


  7. Susan Alton says:

    We learrned about hai-
    ku in our high school lit class.
    Now I do haiku.


  8. Susan Alton says:

    Your haiku is wonderful!


  9. auntyuta says:

    One teacher in a writers’ workshop brought Haiku to our attention a few times. Unfortunately I never quite got the drift of it.


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