Do You Haiku?


If you had asked me that question before today my answer would definitely be in the negative. Not just a “no”, but a “who me? Do those difficult poems? That clever people do??”

But I thought I’d give it a go.

Here’s my first attempt – please be gentle with your critique…

 

Rain slicing grey skies,

Night time falls with savage rage.

Daybreak brings new hope.

 

I enjoyed composing it, and thinking about every single word in it to convey exactly what I want it to whilst keeping within the restrictions of the form. Definitely something to do again!

 

 

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    1. Thank you Susan! I enjoyed the creative process and am rather pleased with this first effort. I am not entirely comfortable with the way the 5-7-5 syllables scan but it’s definitely worth sticking with and doing again in the future.

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  1. I am not one who has any right critiquing, I had to look up what Haiku even is. Much to my surprise the search engine then wanted to know did I mean Haiku in English form.
    Sorry it took so long to get here i was reading what the two mean. I still have just a slight clue, no real measure of how this is done.
    That being said I think your poem is striking expression between day and night.
    Thanks so much for sharing and please keep up the awesome work.

    Abundant Blessings ~ BB

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    1. Thanks BB – your comments mean a lot to me and I appreciate your feedback. I have never tried a Haiku before but I thought I’d give it a go as a bit of an academic exercise. I’m really pleased with the results to be honest! Even though I’m not entirely happy with the way the 5-7-5 syllables scan, I think I will be doing some more in the future. Thank you 🙂

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    1. I’m new to Haiku Maxi, so am very green, but it’s a form of poetry that follows a strict format. It is a three line poem composed of 5 syllables, then 7, then 5. They are Japanese in origin and I’m not sure I like them to be honest. They don’t scan very well in English and it annoys me that they don’t feel very natural. But as an academic exercise they are good to get the old grey matter fizzing!

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